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Shigetomo
11/02/2007 12:18 PM

I got the idea today to start writing a story, I have gotten a bit of it down on paper and decided that maybe it would be fun to roleplay it. Im not exactly sure how to describe it any other way than this, its going to be a roleplay based on warrior clans consisting of both samurai and ninja, kinda like a naruto/Ruruoni Kenshin mix. The story will have nothing to do with either however, except for jutsu, Basically my idea is this (This is actually what I have written of the story so far)

The war had raged for generations. Chaos reigned supreme throughout the land, warrior clans battled each other for supremacy and control of each other. Finally in the midst of the bloodshed there arose a warrior prince at the head of a mighty clan. He battled the leaders of the other clans in mortal combat and when the last sword was sheathed he and his clan stood among the victors. His blood stained blade had slain all his opponents and not once had he seen defeat. As the years passed the warrior prince grew old and sickly, finally on his deathbed he gave a last request to his followers. His request was that they find someone equal in skill to him to succeed as head of the clan. Now the hunt is on to find the next...Okashira!

Its gonna basically be like that, the character sheet would be like this

Name:
Age:
Gender:
Clan:
Role: (Ninja or regular warrior)
Weapons: (Can be the same as Naruto weapons)
Jutsu:
Description:
Bio:

Thats basically it and I would like some feedback on it, Thanks

[Edited by Shigetomo on Thursday, November 8, 2007 8:14 PM]

[Edited by Shigetomo on Thursday, December 13, 2007 11:46 AM]

Shigetomo
11/08/2007 11:54 AM

Ive given this one a few days to generate interest and it looks like it hasnt gotten any, thats cool though. It was only an idea

Max
11/08/2007 2:59 PM

hehe...

I just thought I'd let you know that if you do write this on your own, I'd like to see what you come up with. Reading this has made me happy, because I can see the progress you've made in your writing.

For instance, compare this RP idea you had just a couple months ago:

http://www.rpgconsortium.com/rpgforums/discussions.cfm?forumid=19&topicid=288482

That's just a little glimpse in an interest query. Your writings themselves show the improvement more clearly, but this was just a glimpse. I don't have time to go through and find old and new RP posts of yours. :P

Congratulations on your progress! It makes me want to put the rest of my life aside a little and come on here more, so I can improve my writing as well.

:D



[Edited by Max on Thursday, November 8, 2007 4:47 PM]

Shigetomo
11/08/2007 4:22 PM

wow...That feels really nice to know that I am appreciated somewhat

nanuk
11/09/2007 5:03 AM

And here was me going to come and say [i]maybe[/i] you'd get some interest in your threads if people saw that you'd actually stick around long enough to commit to an idea... oh I am a bubble burster...

Max
11/09/2007 6:07 AM

Well, I haven't been around much either. I've only stuck to my threads, I haven't been reading all the other stuff.

But I clicked on this expecting to be annoyed (no offence, Shig), and found that it was pleasingly coherent. Granted, you still rely too much on other sources, but from not reading anything of yours in a while, I was pleasantly surprised.

If you keep disappearing, then yes, that would be another problem you need to work on. :P

I still say, however, that your quality of writing has improved.

Shigetomo
11/14/2007 1:30 PM

The story has been going well so far...I agree Max, I may still be too heavily influenced by outside sources and thats something im going to try and work on

Shigetomo
12/13/2007 11:31 AM

I was wondering If any minds had been changed as to this rp. The story has been going fine but I havent been able to get very much further because I have only introduced two characters. Even if no one wants to rp this could you please fill out a character sheet that I could use to make more characters?

Thank you.

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