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SparrowHawk
08/13/2007 3:00 PM

If any of you have ever read the rise of solmania books you will have have heard of the compound which is the place were the king made his bombards. Which helped greatly against Ankard and his horde.

This story will take place in a town near palanthas I be an traveler who came across a book describing these bombards and after mastering there craft posts a page looking for able bodied warriors to become "The was a smudge" on the paper.

We will become pirates and raid the rivers and the seas look for lost treasure and discover all new, player created places. So you and me and the whole crew make the adventures.

Here is a player sheet for my character:

Name: Fazon
Former Job: Map maker/Dungeon Explorer/Sailor
Hair: Copperblonde tied under a bandanna
Gender:Male
Race: half human half elf
Class: Marksman
Weapons: Homemade duel 8 shotters, and scoped rifle. rapier
Clothes: Bandanna, Leather clothes
Hobbies: Treasure hunting gun smithing and sleeping
Height: 6 ft
Age: 25

Post characters if you are in!

Tamachi
08/14/2007 4:43 PM

Sparrow, first off you started off right, but there are several things that I know you can improve on to both garner attention as well as make your RPG a better experience for everyone...


If any of you have ever read the rise of solmania books you will have have heard of the compound which is the place were the king made his bombards. Which helped greatly against Ankard and his horde.

This story will take place in a town near palanthas I be an traveler who came across a book describing these bombards and after mastering there craft posts a page looking for able bodied warriors to become "The was a smudge" on the paper.

We will become pirates and raid the rivers and the seas look for lost treasure and discover all new, player created places. So you and me and the whole crew make the adventures.


Now, I for one haven't read the Rise of Solmania books, but in most every case I have seen I can at least get an idea of what is going on from the idea thread of a book-related RPG I haven't read. That said, a little more detail may go a long way. Also, I know you can do better on your grammar. That right there, bad grammar, will turn away a [i]lot[/i] of potential players...


Former Job: Map maker/Dungeon Explorer/Sailor


This is normally where the history segment would go, with more detail than just a few occupations. Tell us how Fazon got to where he is today. How did he begin?


Hair: Copperblonde tied under a bandanna
Clothes: Bandanna, Leather clothes


This would normally go under appearance, and here detail is greatly appreciated. Tell us what Fazon looks like. What color are his eyes? What color bandanna? What kind of leather clothes?


Hobbies: Treasure hunting gun smithing and sleeping


Sometimes, I like to incorporate my characters hobbies and emotional state in either the history, appearance, or both. It just depends on how it fits...

Overall, I think this post has a lot of potential, and I just want to see it be the best it came be. I may, however, suggest that you RP under some more experienced GMs before you start your own, since you have under a year under your belt. Just a suggestion though, you do whatever your ready for. I only say do that because you may want to get a feel for the way RPing works around here...

Also, you should definitely check out Firefox, because it has a built in spell check that is [i]extremely[/i] handy. The Google Toolbar has the same thing, but the Firefox is more convenient in my opinion...

Anyway, I wish you the best of luck, and hopefully I didn't turn you off from staying with us. If you need anything, drop me a line through the Internal Mail system. That, or when one of the more experienced patrons come around they will be glad to help...

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