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VampireTsukiya
09/15/2005 5:41 AM

Ok this Rpg is about young Vampire wondering around trying to figure out what to do next, when she meets a werewolf, since Vamps, and Wolf's are enemies, they start to fight, but in the end they become friends, and decide to stop the war and conflit between the two races. While they are working together she starts having feelings for the wolf but doesn't say anything at first. But its gets more complicated when Bounter hunters come for them.

Ok what we need in the RPG is at least 2 or 3 elders, and both Vampires and Werewolves. ^_^. I will be playing the Vampire who wants to stop the war.

Character forms:

Name:
age:
gender:
eyes:
hair:
race:
weapons:
bio:

Characters:

The 2 that try to stop the war/
Kiya: Me (Vamp)

The others on the Vamp and Wolf side/

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My character:

Name: Kiya
age: 15
gender: female
eyes: ruby red
hair: Long silver
race: Vampire
weapons: daggers
bio: A young Vampire wondering around trying to figure out what to do next, when she meets a werewolf. They then start into a fight but end out making peace with each other. both of them get to talking and decide to stop the war and conflit between the two races. While they are working together she starts having feelings for the wolf but doesn't say anything not knowing what he would think

Kalia_Majere
09/15/2005 5:44 AM

first and foremost... This is a White-Wolf World Of Darkness Forum... not just any random vampire/werewolf rp. if this is not a WOD setting, I am going to move it to the general forum where it belongs.

Damien
09/15/2005 5:56 AM

[b]1.)[/b] Try playing something else besides vampires and vampire-related crap. Once in awhile is okay -- but naming yourself "Vampire___" and then immediately trying to be part of two vampire RPs.... it's lame. And not only that, it's fucking pretentious. Grow up.


[b]2.)[/b] You have -not- been here nearly long enough to start your own RP thread. You need to join existing RPs and stay with those to get your feet wet. Bottom line: You need experience to start your own threads. By the time you're ready to start making your own RPs, you'll have done two important things:

a.) established yourself as a noteworthy RPer and thus attracted other members that are willing to RP with you and trust you to run an RP and

b.) actually learned how to RP. This is important, because I can tell by your post that you barely have the slightest idea what you're doing. If you actually join existing RPs first, then you'll become better at it.


[b]3.)[/b] This entire thing is a blatant rip-off of Underworld. Once you have experience, you'll actually be able to come up with your own storylines. Until you can do that, you have no business running an RP.


[b]4.)[/b] Your character bio is the same as your plotline. Not only is that idiotic and smacks of unoriginality and bad roleplaying, but it centralizes your character. That's a bad thing. An RP thread should be about -everyone-, not just about your character. Meaning, there are no "main" characters. It's egocentric and stupid. Not to mention it is bound to bore the shit out of everyone.


[b]5.)[/b] Ignoring #4, your plotline is at once totally useless and too detailed. Meaning, you haven't given nearly enough information about the setting itself, while you've given far too much information about what is going to happen. You cannot set down all the things that are supposed to happen in the plotline and expect everyone to act it out for you. This is not your personal novel, it's an RP thread. Your job is to set everything in motion - establish a BEGINNING, [b]not[/b] a middle and end.


[b]6.)[/b] Your writing style is vapid and shitty. Your sentences are completely flat and matter-of-fact. Also, you give absolutely no detail in your writing, poor punctuation... in general, your writing is absolutely horrible. Nothing about your bio/plotline grabs the attention of the reader. As I said, it's completely flat and uninteresting.


[b]7.)[/b] Did I mention that this 'plotline' of yours is a [b]BLATANT RIP-OFF OF UNDERWORLD[/b]?


[b]8.)[/b] You absolutely suck at this. So as I said before -- look around, read what other people are doing, and join other RPs to gain experience.








[Edited by Dark_Elf_Damien on Thursday, September 15, 2005 5:57 AM]

dizzy
09/15/2005 6:58 AM

Hey if you can't say something nice don t say nothing at all, not everyone wants to hear you bitch and besides if the people on a thread are causing problems then the people who are in charge of this site will handle it, you dont have to. So calm down and take it easy.
Not all of us are perfect


[Edited by dizzy on Thursday, September 15, 2005 7:29 AM]

Damien
09/15/2005 8:00 AM


Hey if you can't say something nice don t say nothing at all


I'll say whatever I please. Especially when it's the truth.



not everyone wants to hear you bitch


I couldn't give a shit less what you want to hear. I'm telling the OP what they need to hear.



if the people on a thread are causing problems then the people who are in charge of this site will handle it, you dont have to.


Take your own advice you nosey little shit. If I am doing something that doesn't need to be done, the Mods will let me know it. But you are not my keeper, and if you keep whining anytime I say something you don't like, I'm going to really start to rip into you. And then -you'll- be banned for inciting flames. So shut the fuck up, and back the fuck off, eh?

Kalia_Majere
09/15/2005 4:52 PM

**OFFICAL STAFF NOTICE**


take it off the boards.... got it Dizzy?

dizzy
09/19/2005 7:11 AM

Woo-we someone's got a temper behind all that insecurity, Look I didnt want to add any more bad friction between each other and i don't want to fight i'm not the one who is cussing every other word. I just think (and I know you dont give a shit about what I think but hear me out) that maybe you should lay off the people; some of these people arent very good at this sort of thing and need help not insults. And as much fun as it is making other people feel lower than you it doesnt fix the problem.

Out of respect for you and the mods Im not going to continue this mindless bickering between you and I.

[Edited by dizzy on Monday, September 19, 2005 7:17 AM]

Damien
09/19/2005 8:06 AM


Out of respect for you and the mods


Too late, you already ignored a Mod, which invariably ends up with you getting into trouble. You should have been smart enough to listen when told to stop.

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