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Verbalscrapper
07/10/2007 11:00 AM

Welcome to your generic Earth. But what is it, you may ask, that makes this earth so different than any other? Easy my friend, it is the way our story is told and the being crawling, flying, walking, and phasing through it. This is a hardboiled tail my friends and one to stretch the limits of your spiritual imaginations. A world where demons and angels alike live and thrive on our plane of existence, where dragons take human form to seek out their true loves and prophets live without ever knowing what they are.

Yes my friends life as we know it goes on but scratch beneath the skin of any mortal being and there is a story to tell. I know the setting sounds vague and the boundaries almost limitless but you will catch on as to where I lay down the line but to spare you the boring details I beg of you to delve right in to my world of fancy. For any of you who would like a better understanding of how this world is shaped and formed please read on and for those of you who need a character sheet scroll down to the bottom where I shalt lay out an example.

Now for those of you wishing for a few boundaries, for restrictions breed creativity, here are my rules. Angels and demons are generic terms and they have no sway on alignment, these are not your religous types of terms they are merely describing terms. Angels and demons and most supernatural try to keep their presence unknown to the human populace but they do have grounds in which they like to hang out such you will find when you enter Cerberus.

Anything can take on human form in order to hide what they are. However only some can take on forms of various creatures if you have questions post them in the OCC because others might have the same question. Battles will be rare so I won't post anything now, most things will be a battle of wits. Angels and demons have answer to hire powers. Angels answer to the elders, and demons to Damien (again a generic term this is far from religous.) Dragons, are rare and are dying out as many seek there powers, angel and demon kind alike.

I could go on and on about the restrictions but for now play it by ear, play carefully, and have fun! Let your imagination go and lets see what a poem we can create.


Character Sheet:

Name: Katherine Scaletym

Species: Dragon

Human Form: Light brown hair with odd copper highlights, pale gray eyes, fair skinned, average weight and height, nothing particularly striking about her.

Occupation: FBI Agent

General Description: (Place as little or as much as you want. I know some people like to reveal things as they play.) Katherine isn't looking for trouble, she is just seeking out the soul she swore to protect, and failed. Death took her beloved into her realm of existence and since then she has been tringto find ways to pull her out. But barganing with the Eternals is not easy.

Misc: anything I didn't cover here. Weapons, powers, ect. ect.

nanuk
07/13/2007 2:47 PM

Name: True name- Ashtad. 'Human' name- Aaliah Zahedi

Species: Angel

Human form: slender and lithe Aaliah is tall at just over 5'10. She appears to be what we would think of as Iranian/Persian- her features are heavy and sensual, her hair long, straight and dark, with clear olive skin, and dark mahogany-brown eyes.

Occupation: bookstore owner (if you're going to steal angel-occupations then steal from the best- how I love you, Good Omens). The store is deceptively small from the outside, tends more towards the obscure than the bestselling, and gives her the luxury of setting her own schedule.

General Description: Ashtad is well experienced at accomplished as passing for human, quite enjoying the small details of their lives. She is fond of them, as one is fond of a particularly cherished and intelligent pet, seeing them as wonderful if foolish things, who frequently need to be protected from their own instincts. She is one of a small cell in the city, gathering information for the Elders, communicating with and monitoring other angels, intervening in mortal/demon affairs when requested. Her role is concerned frequently with ensuring justice, extending to administering punishment.

Misc:
Powers- don't want to go into too much detail, may alter some stuff.
Ashtad can become insubstantial at a molecular level to travel at speeds. Although it does take some thought she can use this ability to avoid harm if necessary.
She can influence the minds of humans- sort of an aura of charm that reassures them, giving them a sense of trust and security and making them susceptible to suggestion.
Besides the standard greater-than-human strength she can at times channel energy- her own, that of others, or that from her surrounds- into healing other people
If aroused to a fury she can summon a flaming sword from the aether.

nanuk
07/13/2007 5:33 PM

Is Cerberus a bar or something Scrapper?

Apart from being a legendary three headed dog, obviously. lol

Verbalscrapper
07/13/2007 5:50 PM

Oh sorry, forgot you guys aren't in my head. And isn't it like 2 in the morning over there you crazy woman? Um ok setting info. .... I .... hang on...

The Gates of Cerberus are two buildings that look out onto a street that leads into a section of town run by.... otherworldly creatures. Think Sin City Old Town except not hookers. The two buildings have identical underground passages that lead to a "belly". It is the same "belly" They lead to. The passages are known as the throat of Cerberus, except that nobody knows where the third head is or the third throat. Anyway... so yes the Gates of cerberus is a bar like setting, but two identical bars and you have to pass them to get into Hades which is the section of town I mentioned earlier. Folklore from around the world will be big in this story.

This is a rough bar, dark and with mysterious sketchy people. I was going to go into detail in my next post but if you want to meet me atthe Gates then by all means you can describe the bar. Actually if you want you could be responding to my want add there.

nanuk
07/14/2007 8:05 AM

Groovy.

I shall respond to the ad and be there- won't describe the bars though, they're your babies and I'm sure you have something in your head already ;)

Verbalscrapper
07/14/2007 8:18 AM

Sorry nanuk not tryingto block you out, having trouble thinking on how to speed us along to the bar. Oh also, I'm sorry for the odd writing style, just in my head I am narrating it like they do in Sin City, that's actually partially where this idea came from, and it helps me stay in character. If you want you can post even before I arrive, not necessarilythe setting but set up how you got the ad, what your interest in it was. You know that kind of stuff.

nanuk
07/14/2007 8:28 AM

No worries, take your time getting there- I feel sick from eating cornflakes too quickly so I can't really concentrate on a post, lol.

I thought the writing style was like some gumshoe-detective novel or something, lol. It's interestingly different though.

Verbalscrapper
07/14/2007 8:40 AM

Excellent that was what i was going for I just didn't know if I had the right terminology.

Don't get sick, a sick nanuk makes me sad. Alas, I must go to rehearsal, anywhoozer, hopefully there will be lots of interesting things when I get back. Feel free to take to the bar and Deliria step in anytime. I would say you can have control of my character but I have too many hidden agendas for the moment.

Right... to Rehearsal!

nanuk
07/14/2007 9:20 AM


Dante cackles to himself. It must be fiendish humour, because it is certainly lost on you.


Er, could we lose the second person singular referencing ('lost on [i]you[/i]') because for me it's reading like one of those Choose your own Adventure novels, lol.

Also, just a reminder- to state that humour is lost on another person's character is equivalent to bunnying- you're assuming things about their personality. You can certainly have him thinking/[i]expecting[/i] it to be lost on her, but shouldn't really flat out say it.


I'm shattered, but will try and get an intro post up after I've had a (hopefully refreshing) shower.

Crix
07/14/2007 2:05 PM

My bad, edited last post in accordance with OOC chat.

Verbalscrapper
07/15/2007 2:31 PM

I'm sorry I didn't describe you guys better it's just not my forte to describe others' characters. So if it sounds like I am ignoring you I'm not just trying to get a better feel for all of you before I screw something up.

Crix
07/15/2007 2:53 PM

OMG i started calling myself DANTE instead of DARIO like halfway through the story...

ugh... *goes on an editing spree*

Crix
07/15/2007 2:54 PM

Phew. Okay. Fixed that disaster. Thats what I get for having two "D" names in two stories on the same forum. I hope i didn't start calling myself Dario in the other thread... ugh..

nanuk
07/15/2007 4:19 PM

lol- I remember reading it and thinking 'Was he always called Dante? How come I didn't notice? It should have prompted me to finish DMC3', heh.

Crix
07/15/2007 4:41 PM

Yeeaaaah... the other thing I was super worried about, was like, if any of you guys had this thread set to email you anytime any changes were made, or worse, you had your email forwarded to text messages on your phone... like I do, so I can hop on and reply while I am at work... yeah... i just totally flooded your inbox with "Crix edited a post on thread "Hardboiled fantasy"..."

If I did flood anyones inbox...

I sowwy :(

Verbalscrapper
07/15/2007 5:14 PM

Wow man that's devotion, sending it to your phone. If I got internet on my phone I fear I would never pay attention in school, I'd be constantly checking the RPG threads. Hmm... maybe that's not such a bad idea.

Crix
07/15/2007 5:18 PM

Hell yeah! I am NERDCORE!

I got like a 15$/month deal for unlimited AIM, Yahoo! IM, Text Messaging and Web Browse on my phone.... so.. then I got a T-Mobile sidekick... and now I do 99% of my web posting from my Workshop. Provided, of course, I am not up to my neck in hardware i need to repair. And..... I have NOTHING on my desk today! So... yeah.. I kinda... spend alot of time lurking my various forums. But lately... just RPGC.. because... this forum OWNS

Crix
07/15/2007 5:20 PM

Sidenote... my supervisor prefers that I am dicking around on the phone, to falling asleep in the shop....

Because when I fall asleep in the shop... yeah... pictures of them murdering me with band saws get taken...

Like my avatar! hahaha

nanuk
07/15/2007 5:46 PM

lol, what a fun workplace.. ;)

I have an internet capable phone but have never used it for that. Oh, I tell a lie- I once downloaded a Dangermouse ringtone...

Said phone is MIA at the moment, can't bloody find it anywhere. Grr.

nanuk
07/15/2007 5:52 PM

Oh, also- I don't have email alert set. I'm on regularly enough that I don't need it.

REally want to reply tonight Scrapper but it's 2am and I'm awning so much that I'm worrying about my jaw snapping- I'll get to it tomorrow. Or, I suppose, later on today.

Verbalscrapper
07/15/2007 6:03 PM

You crazy Irish woman. Staying up until ungodly hours. Wow ok this coming from a 16 year old. Sadly when I am no acting, and when I am not with girlfriend this is where I am. I feel like a complete bum. Oh well, at least I am being creative right?

nanuk
07/16/2007 2:06 AM

True, true.
That's how I comfort myself ;)

And I don't realy stay up so late- I'm a night owl, and when insomnia is a frequent companion it kind of deters you from going to bed, lol.

Crix
07/16/2007 1:47 PM

I know how that feels. I was a complete insomniac for all of highschool, it was terrible. Growing pains, I guess, because it all sort of stopped around when I was 17.

I am positively addicted to this thread, I can't wait to see where it goes.

Crix
07/18/2007 11:38 PM

Hey scrapper, does your character need a ride home from Dario? If so, my next post will ask that, and detail the car ride home, if not, ill post about something else. Its up to you.

Verbalscrapper
07/20/2007 8:12 AM

Ok so Pacs brought up an interesting point in a E-Mail he sent me and I meant to cover this earlier but I didn't.

I am sure you have all figured out that all the characters we are playing are for the most part ageless, not immortal, just ageless. However there is a little interesting twist I would like to add about breeding. True Demons and True Angels can not be created except by the Elders and Damien. However, half breeds can be created, such as Dario's character. So all good there. Here is the twist. Angels and Demons can prevent themselves from being killed. How may you ask? Well here is how. Demons and Angels can leave their essence inside of a human vessel. Not just any human vessel however but vessels with magical properties such as prophets and wizards/witches/sorcerers(ess), which is why prophets have become so necessary to the war.

This doesn't have to be done through sex persay, it can be done by ritual or whatever you can think up. So when a Demon or Angel is slain they are reborn through their vessel. Now I am not talking aww how cute baby, I'm talking more like Alien, bursting forth from the poor persons body. This means both men and women can be vessels and no they won't look pregnant.

Ok this however does not cover what Pacs said. You know how I said before Damien and others were breeding dragons for magical ability, well it is hard to do so because most dragons are avoiding this planet and certainly their are not many in "hell" or "heaven" so what they have been doing is essentially what demons and angels do with their essence except that small little creatures are born, it can be any human (because dragons already represent immense amounts of magic) and it has to be female. These "humans" however do not realize what they are until their teenage years at which point they can choose to remain in human form or shape shift to true form.

While they are still "unawakened" I guess you could say, it is very hard to detect them, except by those of exceptional power, such as Damien himself.

SO Pacs your character could bring quite the interesting element into our story. Hope you guys didn't get lost inmy imagination. I have way to much time to daydream some times.

Oryan_Pacs
07/20/2007 8:21 AM

Thats awesome to hear and a very clear headsup for me...noticed that 'dragons' are mainly female is that right. I mean I can easily change character reference to female if required.

Also any other critiquing or advice for posting??

Verbalscrapper
07/20/2007 8:29 AM

Oh no, dragons aren't mostly female it's just if you are going to breed them then you need a female vessel. Did I say that... If I did forget I did... I think I am losing my mind.

But yeah uh.. you just need femals for the whole essence transfer thing where as you can have both males and females for Demons and Angels.

Oryan_Pacs
07/20/2007 8:33 AM


Oh no, dragons aren't mostly female it's just if you are going to breed them then you need a female vessel. Did I say that... If I did forget I did... I think I am losing my mind.


No you did say...I was just getting to far ahead of myself and making more difficult on myself than need be as usual!
I need to read more thoroughly is all!!

Max
07/20/2007 8:37 AM

I'm just gonna use the names you had put, because I suck at thinking of names for fictional geography.


Name: Jamie Ko

Species: Human

Appearance: He keeps his black hair cropped short, or sometimes completely bald. His complexion is a rich dark chocolate. His are a deep brown, almost black, to seem almost as one large pupil.

Occupation: Metalworker/traditional blacksmith and weapon smith/artist. He sells custom made weapons to order, and makes metal sculptures and other artsy stuff. ;-)

General Description: He hates all non-humans. As I said before, he wants them all to go off and play in their own dimension. There is an intricate and involved back-story, which I will reveal in the RP.

He was 'gifted' (or cursed, as he sees it) with the ability to use magic. He hates it, but uses it as a necessary evil to combat the invading trans-dimensional beings.

Due to his work at the forge, he is quite strong, although not bulky in appearance. He was born in Yamkin (think Jamaica), and lived there until his family moved to The Mips (think Miami) when he turned 16. Both of these are extremely dangerous areas to grow up, having the highest rates of violent crime in all of Generica, so he knows how to street fight and defend himself, but hasn't ever had any real training in combat.

Verbalscrapper
07/20/2007 8:40 AM

Sweet we have quite the collection of people. I think this is the most I have ever played with. I'm so excited!

Oryan_Pacs
07/20/2007 8:48 AM

Name: William Joseph Karmichael

Species: Stygian Hell Dragon

Human Form: Mid-twenties, Black Hair, lightly tanned, brown eyes, 6'1" 215 lbs.

History: William Joseph Karmichael almost never came to be. Brought into this world as a still born, parents saw this as a black sign and refused to have any connection with the child and so abandoned the child. Three hours later a Materia Nurse found that the child in fact was still alive, but blind. However with no parents the Materia Nurse and the rest of the Materia Staff decided to name him William Joseph Karmichael after each of the three nurses husbands and soon was sent to an orphanage.
Twenty-six years later, William is embracing life with the love of making people smile and laugh and with life and has made so many friends and new experiences. Always the first person there to lend a helping hand, the first ear to talk to. Life is still hard on Will, he has accepted being blind since birth, and he has accepted that he was practically still-born. He accepted that he was abandoned; he also accepted that he was an orphan; he accepted that life was going to be tough on him. And that he took the challenges of life and love by the horns and ridden it with the widest smile. However learning the truth that he was a dragon was mind blowing...but being a Stygian Hell Dragon, was damned.

Human Form: Top agility and being blind his senses have heightened, as well as his reflexes. Lacks discipline to finally tune them even further. And the 'Gaze of Damien.' If threatened, and is not wearing his dark glasses. When eye contact is made with attacker, the attacker is then sent excruciating pain as their eyes feel like they are 'burnt out' or are momentarily blinded during battle same in dragon form.

Dragon form: (Unknown) Although William has resisted every urge to become a dragon, this does not stop from the others sensing his presence. However with Stygian Hell Dragon's they are very combative and aggressive when provoked, yet very few remain. As only Damien himself could tame the dragons long enough to acquire their magik and so bred them in hell only to be used for their magik.

Occupation: Blind Aid for New Blind Students in Local Universities.

Misc: William wears dark wrap around sunglasses, which hide his eyes other than being physically blind. An Magikal Metallic Silver Titanium Mobility Cane with properties, that it can transform into any solid weapon under the influence of William. Can not manifest bolts of energy and can not form complex workings of a gun or bomb. It is only an instrumental tool in battle when it is used, like a sword, a metallic whip, a staff, a trident, a pole. This was given to him by the nurses as this is what they presumed was his fathers to give to him. They were under strict intsrtuctions to give this to him when he was old enough to have one. William soon discovered the true powers of the cane and researched as much as he could to fully understand the cane in hopes to know more about his father.


[Edited by Oryan_Pacs on Wednesday, July 25, 2007 5:32 PM]

Verbalscrapper
07/20/2007 9:04 AM

Yep yep, S'all good. Feel free to post whenever you wish. I tried to give you a bit of a door way.

Oryan_Pacs
07/20/2007 9:41 AM

Let me know what you think, too cheesy, not cheeesy enough, too cliche, too light...so I have an inkling where to direct or write to next.

nanuk
07/20/2007 9:58 AM

Sorry for the abrupt ending of that, I'm not feeling too well and kind of ran out of steam.




Let me know what you think


Do I unleash the grammar nazi on you?.. lol.

I suppose, the sooner you meet her the better ;)

'You are' contracted is you're, not your, heh. Nothing much to say apart from that.

Oh, except- what are Materia nurses?
I like the idea of a Stygian dragon.

Oryan_Pacs
07/20/2007 10:15 AM


Do I unleash the grammar nazi on you?.. lol.

I suppose, the sooner you meet her the better ;)


Yea, I'll read more slower but thank you for being the one to introduce me to the grammar nazi she was very helpful...and cute ;)


'You are' contracted is you're, not your, heh. Nothing much to say apart from that.


Thanks Nanuk, you passed my test of me planting the bad seed in my writing...and waiting for someone to pick up on it...just like I planned...NOT! LOL

As for Materia Nurses, I have a tendency to make up new jobs like Materia Nurse when Nurse would of sufficed.

But thank you much for the creative feedback...and hope you feel better soon. So if you would excuse me I'm off to bed 5.14am has ticked over so I better get some shut eye I reckon.

PLease don't kick me off while I sleep!! LOL And keep those creative juices flowing!!

-Happy Writing Peeps!

Crix
07/20/2007 4:30 PM

Hehe D, i think if you check the last two posts, Katherine and Dario are standing just outside the car, not sitting inside it.

Its all good either way, though.

Verbalscrapper
07/20/2007 5:45 PM

Alright, I'm not sure if you guys caught on but that blip of magik energy I put that in for two reasons, one so maybe it could lure in Max's character and two to lure in Pacs character, and three (my bad there are three) it will be revealed later.

Deliria
07/20/2007 5:52 PM

Wow....

I completely misread that entire thing...its been a long day...

I'm off to edit accordingly!

Oryan_Pacs
07/20/2007 8:29 PM

hey scrapper,

you obviously have a slightly clearer track of where you want this story to go. And I'm gathering you taking one step at a time and don't want to get too far ahead of yourself too.

I have a track I want to go with 'Will' and what his involvements will be with the rest of characters and narrative. However you may see something completely different, for that matter so might everyone else too.

Just want to avoid building up for one angle, and be given 'WTF' is he doing look later on you know. Not that I probably would, heavens forbid!

Taken that it's pretty self explanatory in some places. Oh well I'll leave you with that, got work now so I can simmer on it for the next seven or so hours and might even change my mind and ending up asking you a completely different question altogether.

...I think too much, should of listen to mum! :p

Max
07/21/2007 6:31 AM


Let me know what you think



You asked for it. ;-)


About the whole Materia Nurse and Materia thing...it sounds like something you stole from a game, like Final Fantasy or something. Not to mention the fact that the only thing we know is that you are a Materia Nurse. nobody else knows what Materia is. I assume Verbal Scrapper approved it, but for my peace of mind I'd like to know just what Materia is, and what you do as a Materia Nurse. Simply saying:



As for Materia Nurses, I have a tendency to make up new jobs like Materia Nurse when Nurse would of sufficed.


doesn't cut it.

I may be overstepping my bounds, but let me explain. If it was added detail you were going for, you could have gone into specifics, such as an X-Ray Technician, or a RN, or something of the sort. Simply 'making something up' alters the concept of the world which Verbal Scrapper has so painstakingly created. As I said before, I assume you had her approval, but since there is this new aspect of the world, the rest of us need to know about it.



And the 'Gaze of Daemon.'



Just a thought: try integrating it into Scrapper's world by changing it to 'Gaze of Damien', since Damien is the over-arching bad guy here.

The main concern I had is this, though: You're blind. How can you make eye contact if you're blind? It would be random, at best, and you'd probably have a hard time preventing friends or allies from looking into your eyes. This can be a wonderful character flaw, but you hadn't addressed it, and my concern is that you would simply gloss over the fact that you're blind and use it at will.




If you think I'm being harsh, I probably am. Sorry, my Inner Cynic/Critic isn't as cute as Nanuk's Grammar Nazi, but there it is.

Just so you know, I enjoyed reading your RP posts and thought they were well delivered, despite my issues here.

nanuk
07/21/2007 2:59 PM


Just want to avoid building up for one angle, and be given 'WTF' is he doing look later on you know. Not that I probably would, heavens forbid!


Why don't you internal mail Scrapper with your ideas?
That way we don't know, if it's something you want to keep secret, but you can check with her that what you have in mind won't be contrary to anything she has in mind.




my Inner Cynic/Critic isn't as cute as Nanuk's Grammar Nazi,


Few things are.
She has a bow in her hair and everything.

Verbalscrapper
07/21/2007 3:59 PM

Oh boy, I leave for an all day rehearsal and already I feel like fur is flying. Um ok Pavs first.

Pacs- Yes Nanuk has a good idea. If you want to share something only with me by all means go ahead and IM me. I do not mind side stories however as long as we don't all go in forty different directions. For example Aiden has her underlying Asher theme, Nanuk has something up her sleeve, and Dario.... is Dario. Plus it gives the story someplace to go after my conflict is resolved.

Max-I think there was something I wanted to say.... I think just ease up a bit. I am really, really easy going. This world is pretty much imagination, there could be factions and magiks I haven't even heard of or thought of yet so perhaps Gaze of Daemon is some otherworldy thing. Yo no se. Point being as long as it isn't extremly important to story line or character development I don't mind how little or much detail someone wants to put in.

Anyway enough jabbering more thinking and writing!

nanuk
07/21/2007 4:07 PM

I was going to wait till post Aaliah's arrival at Creepy House until Pacs or Max showed up- would make more strategic sense, lol.

Max
07/21/2007 4:54 PM


Max-I think there was something I wanted to say.... I think just ease up a bit. I am really, really easy going. This world is pretty much imagination, there could be factions and magiks I haven't even heard of or thought of yet so perhaps Gaze of Daemon is some otherworldy thing. Yo no se. Point being as long as it isn't extremly important to story line or character development I don't mind how little or much detail someone wants to put in.



Mmk. Like I said, the Gaze of the Daemon wasn't a concern, just a little side interest. I think part of it is that I'm not used to DM's this easy going. I'm used to clearly laid out boundaries for the worlds they've created.

But, Pacs, if you could I would like to know more about Materia, and what you do as a Materia nurse. Since my character is a magik-user, Materia might have some effect on him, so I'd like to know what all is being used in this thread.

I'll get up a post soon. I don't think Jamie is going to stay long...doesn't feel right for the character yet. Maybe later there will be a confrontation. :)

Oryan_Pacs
07/22/2007 3:10 AM


About the whole Materia Nurse and Materia thing...it sounds like something you stole from a game, like Final Fantasy or something. Not to mention the fact that the only thing we know is that you are a Materia Nurse. nobody else knows what Materia is. I assume Verbal Scrapper approved it, but for my peace of mind I'd like to know just what Materia is, and what you do as a Materia Nurse. Simply saying:


Hey braddah, i didn't think it that way, with the whole ruining the story for scrapper, and no not at all are you being harsh...I'm sure we are all mature enough here to take creative criticism.
It's people like you (honest-but not the nasty honesty lol) who I write for, the challenge, and there I say again creative criticism.
When Scrapper first noted that this was a fantasy/modern archish world the first thing that popped into my head was exactly that...Final Fantasy.
Maybe not the best idea to have done, however my excuse for 'tendency to make jobs up' was weak and I apologise.

If I really think about it, the real reason I saw that the Materia Nurse did'nt deal with mortal patience, only with 'Magikal' ones. I should have added that in, but as you can probably guess I rushed my history of Will Karmichael. I really wanted to get my teeth into writing...however that is not an excuse, but I do appreciate your feedback...really. Because it showed well...you did read it!



The main concern I had is this, though: You're blind. How can you make eye contact if you're blind? It would be random, at best, and you'd probably have a hard time preventing friends or allies from looking into your eyes. This can be a wonderful character flaw, but you hadn't addressed it, and my concern is that you would simply gloss over the fact that you're blind and use it at will.

Well the last thing anyone would expect is a blindman to look back at you...well 'sense' at you should be more suitable I think. The Gaze of Damien it should of been, and as for being blind...I still stand by what I said. Yes he is blind but he still has eyes which we all know are windows to ones soul. Just because he can't see, doesn't mean he can't sense. I don't know much, but I gather if you were talking to a blind man, or hear one's breath coming through nostrils or mouth he would know where your mouth is situated on the face. So make the right adjustments and well, leave the rest up to primal extinct. Again here, I should of been more specific sorry.
Wth preventing eye contact in general use though, hence why I wear the glasses(well those ones that wrap three quarters around your head, harder to fall off) not just because he is blind it just happens to contribute to the fact of the gaze. But the gaze is only used when in battle.

But this is again all a learning curb for me, and I'm sorry if you are used to a certain structure. I hope I can adjust accordingly and avoid circumstances like this happening. It's the reason why I ask for feedback, and I appreciate so much. Really, and again I'm sorry.

But enough of that...time to brainstorm...mwahahahahaha!!

nanuk
07/22/2007 6:36 AM

Sorry for the shortness of that- don't know what we're going to be doing so didn't want to put too much.



Pacs- I had a little trouble understanding some of your latest post. Some sentences kind of seemed like they had words missing or something? I don't know whether you were in a rush to get it up or something, lol. It was nice seeing some backstory (though I was a little perplexed until I figured out it was a flashback ;)) but I found I was having to re-read sections a few times.

Maybe it was just me (I'm on painkillers for my back, lol).

Oryan_Pacs
07/22/2007 6:41 AM

Hey, ah man...

Yea as you could tell I done a lot of editing...in the sense I had to cut alot out.

I was trying to make it short, without dragging out too long.

I don't think it was your painkillers, funny how things make sense in your head but soon as someone else read it it's completely past them.

Shucks, bro what you think I should do??

Max
07/22/2007 7:10 AM

Quick! Before Nanuk Sees!


Shucks, [b]sista[/b] what you think I should do??

Oryan_Pacs
07/22/2007 7:12 AM

I fear it's too late...(gulp), bring on the hurting.

Max
07/22/2007 7:24 AM

Oh, and to address the other message...


About the Gaze of the Daemon/Damien/Whatever you're going to call it (by the way, if you do change it, make sure to change it in the character sheet. Scrapper said it's fine to keep it Daemon, so at this point it's up to you. Perhaps Daemon can be a specific demon under Damien's command, who's signature move is 'torturing with a mere glance'. ;) ), I'm glad to see that you had already thought about the combination of being blind and having the gaze attack, that's all I was really going for.

And call me stubborn, but we still don't know what Materia is! :)

You said that you only deal with 'magikal' patients, so does Materia only affect magical creatures? Is it something that humans are totally oblivious to, or can human magik-users use Materia as well? Can it be used to harm as well as heal? Are Materia and Magik separate entities, or are they connected? If they are separate, can they influence each other?

Just give me a general idea of what it is.

Ok, I'm off to write that post I was supposed to do. I didn't have time last night, but I'm going to do it now.

nanuk
07/22/2007 7:42 AM

*cries*

Why does everyone think I'm a guy?

*cries some more*





Shucks, bro what you think I should do??


Just re-read the post before you put it up, lol.
The story elements were fine, it was just some of the structure that seemed rushed- so maybe type it up for, go off and do something to give yourself a little distance, then re-check it.
I personally find it hard to re-check things after just having read them because I'm looking at story rather than grammar/structure, but I don't know what works best for you.

Oryan_Pacs
07/22/2007 7:42 AM

Now you've done it, I will get a description of this to you and everyone else too.

I like the idea of Daemon being under Damien's command...hmmm. But I will change the specifics in character sheet.

As for Materia - I will work on this a little more, but I will say that 'Magik and Materia' are connected just not on the same level with Materia being the ultimate level of the Ethereal Plain and Magik the next level down. Also dependent on the source of the Materia it can also harm and heal, but with Materia only a certain few can actually control it let alone use it. So Materia has to be filtered or 'watered' down first in order to be used by either non-humans and humans. Again dependent on source and the choice of usage etc.

Again more details soon as, if anything Ill prob IM you and Scrapper before I confirm it.

And again sorry!

nanuk
07/22/2007 7:44 AM


So Materia has to be filtered or 'watered' down first


so is it a [i]substance[/i] containing a kind of magical energy (like in FF), and people can use that substance, or is it an [i]energy[/i] type which has to be harnessed?

Oryan_Pacs
07/22/2007 7:46 AM

Lol!!

No I did know you were a 'wahine' by other posts in other threads I was reading, it's a habit I have when I talk to 'femininas' that I call them 'bro' or 'dude'

My humble apologies...and I will slow my brain down enough for my fingers to catch up or is it the other way round?
:p

Oryan_Pacs
07/22/2007 7:51 AM


so is it a [i]substance[/i] containing a kind of magical energy (like in FF), and people can use that substance, or is it an [i]energy[/i] type which has to be harnessed?


It is an energy type which has to be harnessed with time.

Darthwedge
07/22/2007 7:58 AM


*cries*

Why does everyone think I'm a guy?

*cries some more*


Sorry to interupt but *bursts into laughter*

Oryan_Pacs
07/22/2007 8:07 AM


*cries*

Why does everyone think I'm a guy?

*cries some more*


Sorry to interupt but *bursts into laughter*


Great now I've done it...I can already feel the light getting dimmer of my lil existence.

Crix
07/22/2007 8:12 AM

"Some people look different. Beth looks like a dude." - Strong Bad

Cmon! Enough sappy crap! I wanna roast some evil marshmallows!

*roars*

Edit - I totally misspelled Marshmallows as marshmellows... which.. i mean.. they are pretty mellow... but I seriously doubt they have feelings.

[Edited by Crix on Sunday, July 22, 2007 9:02 AM]

Max
07/22/2007 8:47 AM


Again more details soon as, if anything Ill prob IM you and Scrapper before I confirm it.



Yeah. I know Scrapper is very acquiescent, but just for courtesy's sake I'd PM her and get her approval, first. She's the DM, this is her world, in my mind she needs to be fully aware of what's going on and approve of it.

Crix
07/22/2007 9:06 AM

Hrmm... another note about the off-topic nanuk dude-ness...

I have never mistaken Nanuk for a dude. You can tell by her word choices and verbal mannerisms that she is female.

Then again... I did take 2 courses in linguistics in college, and had a mighty strong knack for author gender identification.

Oh well!

RAWR I wish I was a 1/2 Demon IRL... except for the.. you know.. overwhelming emotional burden. Other than that, I wish I was a 1/2 Demon.

nanuk
07/22/2007 9:35 AM


I have never mistaken Nanuk for a dude. You can tell by her word choices and verbal mannerisms that she is female.


Yes indeed.

Start giving lessons to people.


*mutters* never mind the fact that I have a fluffy dog as an avatar and almost unfailingly play XX characters in RPs and complain that I don't like playing boy characters and have Lich and Flark being suggestive at me AND in my profile it says female and I've had this conversation half a dozen times before. Sigh.



RAWR I wish I was a 1/2 Demon IRL... except for the.. you know.. overwhelming emotional burden. Other than that, I wish I was a 1/2 Demon.


I wouldn't be very good at keeping a second identity secret. I'd be all gloaty and 'Hulk smash!'

Crix
07/22/2007 10:36 AM


I wouldn't be very good at keeping a second identity secret. I'd be all gloaty and 'Hulk smash!'


Hrmmm.... except as a 1/2 demon in generica, you would HAVE to keep it a secret because you are dispised by most... EVERYONE!

I mean, except for the rogue band of Demonesses, angels and dragons fighting evil marshmallows in a haunted house.

Plus, I really am pleased with myself over Dario's job choice, because honestly, if there is anyone in the world that is wierd enough to secretly be a half demon, its cabbies.

Verbalscrapper
07/23/2007 9:28 AM

*Takes a deep breath*

Damn guys you really are into this. Ok Let me catch my breath and uh if you could pause on the posting until tonight that would be good. I don't have time to catch up right now,but I will reply by tonight. Sorry I have rehearsal two days in a row every other week and it takes alot out of me.

Right.... um *goes to find head.*

nanuk
07/23/2007 10:14 AM


if you could pause on the posting until tonight that would be good


Right-o, master.

Kind of need for you and Deliria to post anyway, I think.

Relax a little after your weekend! Don't stress!

Crix
07/23/2007 3:28 PM

Yup! Just waiting on them to transform/enter!

*so excited*

Verbalscrapper
07/23/2007 8:02 PM

Ooo, I am really glad you guys caught on to what I wanted for this house. I am really freaking excited.

Mmk the only thing I have to sayis. Pacs- that post was a little hard to interpret sometimes, and as for time.. I feel like an ass I hate critisizing, but *takes a breath*

Time is something that is usually not played with. Time spells I am going to rule out. Damien doens't alter it, The Elders don't no beings on Generica even think of messig with it. Ethereals feel it is against the fates will to alter time, and the fates I guess you could say, although they are an idea, are not to be messed with. They are one of the Endless. The Endless are not to be bothered. (Yes I did get that from sandman.)

I will post in the morning. For now I have alot to think about. I am seeing many different angles and I am enjoying each of them too much to decide right now. Plus I want at least a hello on the OOC from Deliria.

[Edited by Verbalscrapper on Monday, July 23, 2007 8:04 PM]

Oryan_Pacs
07/23/2007 8:54 PM


Time is something that is usually not played with. Time spells I am going to rule out. Damien doens't alter it, The Elders don't no beings on Generica even think of messig with it. Ethereals feel it is against the fates will to alter time, and the fates I guess you could say, although they are an idea, are not to be messed with. They are one of the Endless. The Endless are not to be bothered. (Yes I did get that from sandman.)


Acknowledged!


Pacs- that post was a little hard to interpret sometimes


Yea I have that effect on most people too, I just tried too hard, in one hit...consider it criticised, advised and memorized for me to take on and I'll take smaller steps...a lot smaller.

I'll just keep it simple, okies!

nanuk
07/24/2007 8:56 AM

Just something I wanted to check with you, Scrapper-



Normally if William couldn't sense another dragon it meant two things either death, or she was now being blanketed by another force of Magik, but he just knew she wasn't dead.




I was under the impression there were very few dragons on Generica and that Katherine was, in fact, one of the only ones.
Did I pick that up wrong?

Verbalscrapper
07/24/2007 9:08 AM

There are very few dragons, and yes Katherine only knows of herself in this city. I mean there could be more such as in William's cae where he has just discovered he is a dragon. or in my case where we are using heavy heavy cloak spells to hide what we are but even then they cannot be detectedby their own species. They usually come across as magical humans.

Heh it just occured to me something that I may have to go back and edit and it is raeally my fault for being so casual withthe rules. So let me replace everything here.

Ok, dragons are rare, however I do not deter people from playing them because of the following reasons. Dragons have been forced into hiding on this planet, or just avoid the planet entirely, or try to escape (which is very dangerous). There is a new species of dragon that has appeared on this planet, they are essentially not true dragons (williams character) They are dragons bred into female human beings who when they come of agestart to discover what they are. Some are quick to conceal themselves ohers are not so fortunate. These "dragons" are being bred by both sides to harness their magik. When they start to figure out what they arethey are usually not quick to hide it and thus can be found easily by either angels or demons. At that point it is a race to see who can get them first. William has been concealing himself (I am trying to stick to what he has written and just adding my rules to your story) but evertime he starts to let go to his true form he is just a screaming beacon.

"True Dragons" that are now seemingly stuck on this planet cloak themselves to the point where not even their own species can recognize them. Unless they let go, which i what Katherine did when she got spooked by Aiden. Now I noticed that you recognized me as a dragon as did Dario and Aiden and what I am going to say for that is, I let go of some of my magiks so that I was recognizable by those around me. (My fault for not making that all clear I really wasn't thinking about it.) So Yes there are very few dragons and if they are around they give off more of a magik using human aurathan a dragon aura.

That all made sense right? 'Cause I was re-reading it and it might have been kind of sketchy.

nanuk
07/24/2007 9:49 AM


Now I noticed that you recognized me as a dragon as did Dario and Aiden and what I am going to say for that is, I let go of some of my magiks so that I was recognizable by those around me


Heh.
I was mainly following what Crix and Deliria had posted (and also your post about getting into the cab, I think- thought you mentioned something about wondering if Dario would know, but I might have made that up)- should have gone with my instincts that she'd be able to hide herself, lol. Didn't want to be shown up by demon scum ;)

Max
07/24/2007 11:16 AM

Sweet, I get to do a 'Run Like Hell' post.

This'll be fun.

Probably won't get to it for a few hours, though.

Verbalscrapper
07/24/2007 2:22 PM

I did and that was my fault. I truly wasn't thinking at the time. Nobody has done anything wrong so far, just some kinks were working about but nothing story altering. I really honestly didn't think about the whole hiding myself thing until it got brought up just now.

And Max feel free to run like hell towards the creepy house. It would make for an interesting meet up. Plus you are probably safer inside.... I think. Gulps.

Max
07/24/2007 3:01 PM

hrm...I hadn't thought about running towards the house. Partly because that just doesn't make sense. :P

If you need me to, though, I will. I was under the impression that there would be another time to have the big meeting, but if you insist on me going towards the house, I'll get the hint that I need to go there. ;-)

Deliria
07/24/2007 4:49 PM

I AM SO SORRY...

and hello...
but i had a bit of a family emergency and should have let you guys know what was going on...but in the chaos i completely lost track of everything. My grandmother passed away on saturday, and my family has divided.

Not that you guys needed to know that, but you really do deserve the explanantion.

Max
07/24/2007 5:35 PM

Haha...Deliria, I think our characters will have a row at it when they finally meet. :)

Oryan_Pacs
07/24/2007 6:10 PM

Thanks for the clearing of the info Scrapper much obliged!



My grandmother passed away on saturday, and my family has divided.


Our respects and best wishes Deliria.

Max
07/24/2007 6:12 PM

@.o

I completely missed that last OOC post.

I'm sorry to hear that, Deliria. My deepest regards.

Deliria
07/24/2007 6:41 PM


Our respects and best wishes Deliria



I'm sorry to hear that, Deliria. My deepest regards.


Thank you, I appreciate it.



Haha...Deliria, I think our characters will have a row at it when they finally meet. :)


I look forward to it. ;)

Verbalscrapper
07/24/2007 9:28 PM

Oh dear... I am really sorry. My deepest condolences. You don't have to explain yourself my dear, it is quite alright. We'll always save a spot for you.

Crix
07/24/2007 9:37 PM


She stared at Dario in his full half-demon glory


Yes! My FULL.. uhh... half demon... GLORY! Deliria, your brightened my day. I am sorry for your loss, seriously hope you are feeling better dear.

nanuk
07/25/2007 7:38 AM


My grandmother passed away on saturday, and my family has divided.



Ugh, families are just too much trouble.

Thoughts are with you, petal. Hope the family can put the crap aside and give you the peace you need.

Max
07/25/2007 11:02 AM

Wow, that was long...and I'm incredibly late to go back to work.

I couldn't help the side bits of humor, it's what came to me. Maybe I'm just in that sort of mood.

Anyways, hope it was acceptable. Let me know if you need anything changed, or if anything doesn't make sense.

Deliria
07/25/2007 3:43 PM


I am sorry for your loss, seriously hope you are feeling better dear.



Thoughts are with you, petal.



Oh dear... I am really sorry. My deepest condolences.


Thank you guys. It has been hard, but its people like you guys that make me feel like someone cares.

nanuk
07/25/2007 3:58 PM

Of course we care- we're a [i]community[/i]! :)

We have to look after our little stripper demon.
Oh, sorry- exotic dancer.. ;)



Sorry that post was so... bleh- as I've mentioned elsewhere I'm under the influence of hormones, pain and medication at the moment- not to mention tiredness (complete lack of sleep being another one of my lovely 'symptoms') and am having trouble thinking- but I wanted the chance to try to save Max ;)

If you had something else planned, or anyone else did, holler and I'll change it.

Oryan_Pacs
07/25/2007 4:01 PM


Thank you guys. It has been hard, but its people like you guys that make me feel like someone cares.


I think I speak for everyone here, even if I am a noob here you find people care in all shapes, and sizes even demons too! We are all here for ya!




I couldn't help the side bits of humor, it's what came to me. Maybe I'm just in that sort of mood.

Anyways, hope it was acceptable. Let me know if you need anything changed, or if anything doesn't make sense.

That was classic man, I enjoyed the read and the flow especially the fight scenes, nicely played man!

Crix
07/27/2007 8:02 AM

Yeah... my posts have been short... to say the least, but, once we get to a part where Dario is a little more... involved... (like head smashing) i'll pick it up. :)

Verbalscrapper
07/30/2007 8:30 AM

ok sorry guys I was at rehearsal. I'll post tonight.

nanuk
07/31/2007 4:00 AM

Urgh. Not happy with that either- left it too long before posting, I think.

Wasn't sure where you wanted to go with the wound, Crix, so I left it non-committal.

Max
08/02/2007 8:40 AM

I thought that was a nice twist with the vial, but I'm not sure if that's what you were going for. I have an idea for what to do with my next post, if nobody knows how to heal Dario yet. I'll try and keep on this thread every night.

nanuk
08/02/2007 9:15 AM

As I've mentioned elsewhere I am going to be [i]quite[/i] busy the next couple of days, but I'll try to get a response up to Max's post this evening, should have enough time to be able to manage that much.

nanuk
08/03/2007 2:56 PM

A little later than I hoped, lol... it's quite brief because I'm not sure what Max wanted to do.

Let me know if anything needs to be changed

Max
08/04/2007 8:00 AM

Wasn't sure what to do with the Angel Blood, so if you want me to change that, I will.

Verbalscrapper
08/05/2007 5:19 PM

It is really quite alright that people have been busy because I have beenm at rehearsal. I'm juist glad you are all so tolerant with my absences. I will read our latest updates and see where to go with this all. May not get to it till later for I am exhausted but I will be sure to get one in by tomorrow.

Ok so I was asked for more information about The Gates of Cerberus and about Hades as well.

First off Hades goes by to names, Tartarus and well Hades. Tartarus is the more accurate name but many just took to calling it Hades after the central building of that section of the city.

You see Hades was bought out by a very wealthy legion of a rogue faction known simply as the Legion. They delight in fashioning themselves like old Greeks in togas and with round shields and spears and although a comical sight they are not to be messed with. They like to think of themselves as outcasts made up of angels demons and humans and are a competing group in the dragon market. They sell black market goods to both the human world and have even been so well off as to supply the Elders and Damien. They are not touched by the Elites for both sides benefit by their existence.

So Tartarus has become Hades out of the fame of their central head quarters.

As for the actual Gate. The Gate of Cerberus is two buildings connected by an underground chamber. The underground chamber is guarded at each end by a prophet. Noone really knows exactly what is in the Belly of Cerberus so I will not go into detail for I fear I could go a slight bit overboard with my imagination.

The Gates are used to gather information, to converse with fellow Ethereals, to hire a strong arm and to generally hob nob with the rest of the irregular crowd. However times have changed and hostilities between Ethereals and Humans have grown as the war has become increasingly violent. It seems that more often than not Ethereals are seen in the bars and more human parts than anything else. It has also become much less safe as those who once protected and insured the peace have been called away on some mysterious job. This means chaos rules supreme and demon presence has increased where angel presence has declined.

I am unsure if this helps any. There is so much I could tell you about the place that I don't know where to begin. If you have any specific question about the world we are creating just ask. I really don't mind.

[Edited by Verbalscrapper on Tuesday, August 7, 2007 12:13 PM]

Oryan_Pacs
08/07/2007 6:41 PM

Thanks for the info, much obliged!

nanuk
08/13/2007 10:24 AM

Sorry that was so lame- but for the last while was operating under the impression that we were waiting on Max to reply. Then figured out I kind of needed to reply, lol.

Verbalscrapper
08/13/2007 7:51 PM

Aye, i too was under the impression that we were waiting for Max. If he doesn't respond in the next day I'll see what I can do to move it along.

Max
08/14/2007 12:52 PM

I was waiting for Nanuk - I'm in Georgia now, got in last night, so I'm sorry for the crappiness of the post, but I'm in the library and I was rushed at the end, because I have an appointment to run to.

The internet is down at my family's house, so I'm not sure how consistent I'll be with getting on, but I'll try and make regular trips to the local library.

Have to run now - if there are any questions, I'll answer them as soon as possible.

Deliria
08/17/2007 1:06 PM

Absolutely sorry I haven't posted in a while but after the funeral, my mom and I moved me to a house with no internet access, until now. I have to use the library around here, so just be patient with me.

Thanks guys.

nanuk
08/25/2007 11:27 AM

Just in case people don't check the check in/out forum- Scrapper's away at the moment, about to head to Ireland for a week.

Hopefully she'll be back soon.

Oryan_Pacs
08/26/2007 8:02 AM

Well that explains a lot then hehe cheers for the heads up

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