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05/08/2005 3:27 PM

Tell me how this sounds.

Serina Kyubri a 17 y/o Guardian of an old world of earth. She was mortally wounded in a battle of the gods. She woke up fully healed, alive conscious. Unbound to her sourroundings She Lost most of her momory and wIll end up finding that she can controll Spirits and shadows. She is an ordinary School girl untill then.

I want Idea's and comments, it's been awhile since i had my own topic so please help me Fix it up ;P..


05/09/2005 5:03 AM

well Yuna its a nice start but it needs to be a little more open ended, and Im a little confused on the plot.

05/09/2005 3:57 PM

yeah, how will other characters fit into this..?

06/04/2005 6:12 AM

srry pooples vacation xP. Well friends for starters, friends with powers or something? lol.

06/04/2005 9:04 AM

Well, Yuna, it's a good start. But, what are she and her friends going to be doing? And where did her friends get their powers, then?

06/05/2005 10:53 AM

I agree you started out good (better then what I do lol) You should make it long describing more about what this post is and stuff like that.

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